As I look at this picture I remember all of the things that he has accomplish, his first word, his first step, his first laugh. Boy oh what a great laugh he has, that deep down belly shaking on the verge of crying infectious laugh. Of course being his mother I want to do everything in my power to ensure that I will always hear it. This picture reminds me of how lucky I am to have Gabriel. The joy and a miracle it is to give life.
Gabriel is my miracle baby. You see I wasn’t able to have kids on my own. I went through a procedure called IVF which is short for In vitro fertilization. My husband and I had to have a doctor aid us to be able to conceive. I had everything to carry a healthy baby but could get the eggs to where they needed to become a baby. With the aid of my parents to help us finance the procedure we took a leap of faith that it would work and ten months later Gabriel a 7lb 7oz baby boy was born.
I look at this picture and see as simple as it was for Donavan, my husband to take the day off to drive to Lake Tahoe to play in the snow and for us to capture another first of many too come. You see when I look at this picture I not only see Gabriel firsts but I see mine as well, the first time someone called me mommy, the first time he held my hand, the first time we all had a family.
WOW!!! your writing really touched my heart.. It's amazing to read about your baby boy. I do feel that you love him dearly. It must have been hard for you.. at first but I can tell you love him with all your heart. I LOVED the way you mentioned how he held your hand, the hug you had! Your essay has strong points. You just need to add more to your writing, make it more detailed and specific. A format should also be created, but otherwise, I loved reading this. I wish you the best for your family and your loving boy.
ReplyDeleteThank you, LESLEY
I loved reading about your little boy, it made me think about my cousin that I'v been babysitting since he was in diapers. I may not have a child of my own, but I can understand what you are saying both through my own experiences with kids and through your writing.
ReplyDeleteI was really able to tell how much you love your son and family by reading your essay.
To make it a little stronger you could narrow it down to maybe one story and go into detail about that. For example go into how much you wanted a child and how happy your were when your son was born. Or you could talk in more detail about all or most of the frists that this picture reminds you of.
From one mother to another, I can sadly relate to your issues with fertility and to know the struggles, and the fears that I'm sure you knew went through. I had some fertility issues after a tragic miscarriage. I finally got pregnant with my son, but every week of pregnancy brought new fears. Your story touched me.
ReplyDeleteI think your really hit the nail on the head, when you included your stuggles to get that child. I want to think that all mothers enjoy watching their children do things, but some women take their children for advantage. I think you could add more about why THIS snow picture made you want to write about it, as opposed to another first time.
Michelle,
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for your comments on my essay.. You are very nice!!